Rewrite the draft below. Rules: - Short sentences. One idea per sentence. - Plain words a 5th grader knows. - Cut every "it's not X, it's Y" sentence. Just say what it IS. - No em dashes anywhere. Rewrite the sentence instead. - For each paragraph, ask: what is this actually trying to say? Then say that, in one sentence if you can. - Keep my facts exactly as written. Do not add new claims. When you are done, list the 3 weakest sentences that survived and why they are weak. [PASTE YOUR DRAFT HERE]
Why it works: Long sentences, fancy words, and "it's not X, it's Y" are the loudest tells that a robot wrote it. This kills all three.